our class Assembly

This is my first draft writing on our class assembly that we had on Friday 17th March. Our learning intention was to use adjectives and verbs in our writing. Please take a read of my writing and let me know how I can improve my writing.

Last week my  class did a Assembly in the hall. When everyone started to come in. Paris  played the piano when classes were  coming inside the hall.

When the Assembly started Shreya and ina came up to the stage and they did their speech. After  the speech the music   suddenly started. Simon,Paris went up and started to dance and then Fehi,Dorina,Lorenzo and Moses came after and joined the dance. Then  more people  started to dance and then all of my class were doing the dance. The name of the is flash mob.It is a kind dance.

After the dance Ina and Shreya came and stand up to sing the National anthem after the National anthem Shreya and Ina said  Mrs Campbell  can you come up to hand out class awards after the class awards we did our get New Zealand writing metaphors poems